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warship45
10-04-2006, 08:23 PM
hey, i was board so i made this up about one of my friends.

Rain drops fall out of the sky,
people eat lots of pie,
fat become fatter and people die,
now lets stop to have a tie.

Try to run but never get far,
balancing bar is far to far,
stop right here people cheer,
chip shop opens dear o dear.

Cooking classes never to fear,
everyone eats just to make clear,
cookers cook as we look,
teachers lie right in the sky.

lunch time comes and goes in a flash,
lashings of bacon in my lap.

Sunlight rises into the night,
i fight the light to show the sight,
pat the cat with a hat,
don't worry this fry up is low in fat.

People eat to survive,
please don't take away the right,
life is short when in the light,
darkness falls on to the hills,
very handy with these pills.

well thanks for reading it, i would like to hear any comments, i did not think it was very good.

XxKanexX
10-05-2006, 03:53 PM
Rofl.

It dosn't all come together and flow very well. And they sound like very forced rhymes :\

Rams89
10-08-2006, 02:38 AM
ah not too bad

Brandon1793
10-22-2006, 06:23 PM
Better then what I can do, BTW poetry is for fags :)

XxKanexX
10-23-2006, 12:11 PM
Better then what I can do, BTW poetry is for fags :)
Just because you're a heartless prick with no sensitivity dosn't prove you right. (Don't get me started, you'll regret it.)