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wired16
08-06-2008, 07:53 PM
well here is the first one.....

knowing that there's no chance at all
hoping i don't go over the edge and fall
wishing i could just find a way
I'd remind you just how much your loved everyday
I'll wake up waiting to see your beautiful smile
not wanting to get out of bed for a while
realizing i was just dreaming away
now, just trying to keep these feelings at bay
becuase my heart is broke in two
and the only one who can fix it is you

and the second one.....

when im with you time goes by way to fast
wishing that tonight will always last
youre perfect in every little way
it doesnt matter what other people say
giving it all just to be with you
knowing we will love each other no matter what we do
i just hope that we dont crash and burn
or even make a small wrong turn
you are someone that ill never forget
and being with you is somthing ill never regret
no matter how much we fight,
ill always know that we'll be alright
before i go i have to tell you goodnight dear,
and just remember i love you and ill always be here.

Please leave comments and tell me what you think

ShowerThoughts
08-06-2008, 07:55 PM
Keep it at scripting, please :p

wired16
08-06-2008, 08:01 PM
awww.....:(











JK but idk how to script and everytime i try to learn RS updates with some crazy update and completely screws everything up AND all my accounts were banned

EvilChicken!
08-06-2008, 08:10 PM
Wired, these are very good!

Only thing is that you could capitalize a bit more, although I fully understand if it is supposed to be that way.

Anyway, I liked them. Verry good, indeed. :)


@Creampie: stfu neeb. :p <----- LOOK I WAS JOKING OMFG


Edit: Sorry hemppie, forgot the ":p". :)

ShowerThoughts
08-06-2008, 08:12 PM
Wired, these are very good!

Only thing is that you could capitalize a bit more, although I fully understand if it is supposed to be that way.

Anyway, I liked them. Verry good, indeed. :)


@Creampie: stfu neeb.
U almost make me cry :(

Sorry, they aren't that bad

They are even worse :p

wired16
08-06-2008, 08:16 PM
yea i know i need to stanzanize it lol (stanzas) i just sit there and write them and usually dont have time to make it all pretty becuase if i try ill lose what im trying to write cuase ill forget lol but thanks. I thought about getting my poems published but i usually lose my poems becuase either i lose the paper or my brother screws up the computer and i have to format the drive and forget theyre on there

Skitzo
08-14-2008, 11:00 AM
I like the poems themselves, very well-written... but I HATE love poems in general, mostly because I haven't been laid in way too long.

wired16
08-16-2008, 08:49 AM
thanks!

botmaster
09-11-2008, 08:20 PM
Very... moving. *sob* I started crying halfway through thinking of how many girls I've dejected and how they must have felt... :(

Now I'm pissed at you for making me so emotional :D Naww... jk. It's good. Extremely good. Reminds me of when I was 10 years old and had my first luuuvee :p