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Goobs
08-29-2008, 03:39 AM
Okey dokey, whipped this up in like a half an hour.. Hope yeh like it.. ^.^

It's a tragic love story, sorta. It pwns ^.^


A shadow passes o'er the land,
The crows caw in delight.
On Death's right hand we'll make a stand
To save the fading light.

Gnashing teeth and slashing claws
Await those standing nigh.
By nature's laws, we stand and pause
As Lion raised his voice on high.

The drums call loud, the horns are blown
As day comes close to night.
Though overgrown, his mane, it shone
Against the fading light

As Lion walked to meet the men,
He looked upon, with massive pride
The Panther running, for with her
His heart has always lied.

The Lion ran toward the gang,
As though he were under a spell
The Lion sprang, and with a twang
An arrow flew, the Lion fell.

The others saw the Lion fall,
He died for all to see
But through it all, the Panther called
"He gave his life for me."

A shadow passes o'er the land,
The crows call in delight
With pride he stands on Death's right hand
Then walks into the fading light.

ProphesyOfWolf

If you liked it, please click the Eggs in my signature. ^.^

Goobs
09-06-2008, 10:04 PM
Come on, guys.. 34 views and no comments? RESPONSE!

^.^

sirlaughsalot
09-06-2008, 10:30 PM
i like the begin/end thing how the correlate, but, Narnia ripoff plox?

Goobs
09-09-2008, 05:57 PM
Lol no, not from Narnia. My nickname is Shadow Lion, and I was kinda weaving that in there. I guess you're right though; it could be mistaken for Narnia.

^.^

Goobs
02-26-2009, 03:36 PM
BUMPAGE. You guys should say something!

Ruroken
02-26-2009, 06:06 PM
its aiight.

In a few years you style might be polished enough to be published.

Magiic
03-07-2009, 10:45 PM
i like it, although im not much of a poet the abab rhyming scheme and the repeated line seems good.

macknade
03-21-2009, 10:59 PM
did ye write that all yerself