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    Default Poem of hate

    I made this for school >.<

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    1.	Hate is a fire	
    2.  	It is like a beast with many heads, each transforming, each like a tripwire.
    3.	Hate whispers into the ears of men dark tales, and the ears cower with fright.
    4.	And men run millions of miles to escape it, yet they never reach the light
    5.	For its flames of hate are never fully cooled.
    6.         And many are consumed by Hates many heads for they are fooled.
    7.	Hate is a flame.
    8.	And men are to blame.
    9.	for creating this terror.
    10.       Is mans own error.
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    Bit off the flow every now and then, But good.

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    there needs to be more syllables in the last couple of lines to match the beginning, or vice versa, it'll help make the poem flow better

    good words

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    Pretty good poem.

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    didnt really see alot of rhyme but i like the vocab

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