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    New 1 4 u guys

    Alright here is another one. Hmmm why is this part called PATHETIC POETRY!lol. Ok here it is guys. Enjoy feedback is nice. All i ever get is good, great and yea. Oh yea and i do got typos in some of my poems + some minor english like to and too lol so yea.


    As the darkness falls from his fingers, I’m wishing you were here with me, to keep me warm and hearty.
    Instead I’m here by myself, pondering on what I’ve done.
    I’m in distress, I’m confused and lost.
    Without you I’m nothing more.
    He comes for me with his wicked ones.
    I’m leaving soon and I’ll see you never now, never more.
    I’ll leave you with this for I know how you are.
    I leave you with my love.



    woot lol hope u liked.

    Demonic

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    dont seem to have a flow to it realy im not to keen ma self but gj inaway

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    meh it is one of my crappier ones

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    actually i think it has a hidden kind of flow, not perfect, but that is good in its own way. I kinda like it except that words rly hold no deeper meaning for me. I get nothing.

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