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    Default Betrayed.

    This poem's very long, it's like a story-poem-hybrid thingy


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    Look into my eyes,
    you see pain and glory,
    look into my eyes,
    they'll tell you my story,
    
    'long time ago when the world was green,
    i was but a kid, i was only eighteen,
    skilling every day, got bored of the routine,
    went up north, it was a violent scene,
    
    i ask somebody "what the hell's going on?"
    he turns to me and says "Hey, i'm Shaun.."
    he takes me to the bank and guess what he's withdrawn?
    two rune scimmies and it wasn't even dawn!
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    "this thing's too heavy, i can't pick it up!"
    and he looks at me, like real close up,
    "C'mere kid.." so we goes outside,
    wasn't expecting what he'd provide,
    
    a tall old building, empty and grey,
    "This is the training room, okay?"
    i looked about, and to my dismay,
    he hands me a broom, and walks away,
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    I looked up slowly and i could only assume,
    these punching bags were going to their doom,
    a guy brushes past me and he takes a swing,
    the punching bags only hanging by a string!
    
    So i've got this broom, right in my hands,
    and this is the bit that i dont understand,
    just about to hit it and "What is your command?"
    "what the hell was that?" an' i turned around,
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    So... i'm staring at a genie,
    and he's holding a lamp,
    he's wearing a bikini,
    an i look like a tramp,
    
    "Ah master, so you are there,"
    drops the lamp and vanishes into the air,
    and thats when i became aware,
    i had three wishes and the broom wasn't there..
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    Wish one... superhuman strength,
    my muscles grew at a suprising length,
    wish two... some cool equipment,
    rune armour on the floor, not a single dent,
    
    One wish left, what do i need?
    a million gp appeared at some speed,
    how am i gunna pick this up?
    a banker approaches me, "hey whassup?"
    
    "Well i've got a problem.. i need to bank this"
    the banker rubs his eyes, and begins to hiss,
    he tries to attack me but i dive and he missed,
    i pick up the rune scimmy, but he wants to persist,
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    I dive again, and he's charging like a bull,
    i grabbed his neck, and gave it a pull,
    lying on the floor and he's not moving,
    Shaun comes in and his look is quite approving,
    
    "Hey, nice one kid,
    that was pretty smooth",
    "Can't believe what i just did,
    man we gotta move!"
    
    (ECHO) "...Go!!!" (ECHO)
    
    So i put on the rune armour,
    i'm no longer the farmer,
    and i pick up the scimmy,
    but Shaun says "Gimme!"
    
    "You got all that gold man,
    get a weapon and i'll tell you the plan"
    so we broke into a ran,
    and he began.."
    
    "Up there, north is the wilderness,
    and here's something i must confess,
    you're my first great success,
    one day you'll become the best.."
    
    "The best at what?" I ask him,
    "What you did just back at the gym,
    you're a born killer,
    the wilderness'll thrill ya"
    
    bought my own rune scimmy, cost me 30k,
    Shaun says "Follow me" and of course i obey,
    kicking a stray dog as he goes up the path,
    the dog nearly died, i could feel Shaun's wrath,
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    So we get to the ditch,
    jump over the bitch,
    nothing can stop us,
    "whats all this fuss?"
    
    "a fight to the death,
    don't hold your breath"
    so we moved on, between the trees,
    and all of a sudden, Shaun whispers "Freeze."
    
    I turn around, and there he stands,
    dagger in one of his shaky hands,
    "Drop all your money, and your armour too" 
    i do as he says, and then i knew..
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    He lunged forward, dagger piercing my skin,
    as blood gushed out, from deep within,
    i stumble backwards, but i'm still alive,
    not sure how long i could survive...
    
    (ECHO) *Heartbeat* (ECHO)
    
    He puts on my armour,
    and once again i'm the farmer,
    that greedy traitor,
    my anger greater...
    
    (PAUSE)
    
    I thought i was dead,
    the blood on my shirt spreads,
    left here to die,
    without a goodbye,
    
    ...But no...
    
    he looms over me,
    counting.. "One... Two... Three!"
    
    (ECHO) "...NO!!!" (ECHO)
    
    The scimmy's still in my hand,
    as i leapt off the sand,
    high into the air, swinging as planned,
    and off comes his head, i watch as it lands..
    
    (ECHO) * THUD * (ECHO)
    
    as i walk back out of the darkness,
    into the town where i'll die,
    i'm a wounded soldier, a bloody mess,
    i fall to my knees, as you run over.. goodbye..
    
    (ECHO) * Slow Heartbeat * (ECHO)
    
    Look into my eyes,
    you see pain and glory,
    look into my eyes,
    they'll tell you my story...

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    LOL, its about runescape. I like it thought. Its not insnaly sappy, exept that it's about Runescape, and the wildy. I thought it was pretty cool though good job
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    Thanks

    Quote Originally Posted by ProphesyOfWolf View Post
    Good job ^.^

    It woulda been funny, if at the end, he woke up in Lummy like WTF???
    Hehe, I was originally, after the fight with the banker, have him be just about to pick up the money when it disappears, .

    Quote Originally Posted by sirlaughsalot View Post
    It was very good even though it was about runescape lol but i enjoyed reading that
    Thanks =p
    Quote Originally Posted by Timer View Post
    Nice!!!
    Cheers

    Quote Originally Posted by R1ch4 View Post
    Did you come up with that by yourself? Man that's really good!
    Yup, thanks.

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    Nice!!!

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    Did you come up with that by yourself? Man that's really good!
    <3

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    It was very good even though it was about runescape lol but i enjoyed reading that

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    Good job ^.^

    It woulda been funny, if at the end, he woke up in Lummy like WTF???

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