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    Default Spontaneity

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    It's been 50 days and nights
    We've been through several fights
    Nothings left to say
    I just want to end this fray
    
    Fuck all those things you said
    Because none of them were true
    What, do ya think I'm mad?
    You just haven't got a clue
    
    Yeah, humanity can sometimes be moronic
    but that's no need to get all disharmonic
    with the world around ya, you know?
    Don't always go with the flow
    
    So I gotta tell ya, I had a good time
    Take this easy, go read a girly zine
    Just disappear out the door,
    I can't stand the sight of you no more.
    
    You make me rather sick,
    just debased on chick flicks
    There's no real character in you
    I won't keep you any longer.
    First poem. Take it easy with the criticism, I did this in 50 seconds and didn't really have time to bother with metaphors and the deeper heavier stuff. Just freeflow.

    It's been a while... but I'm BACK!!!

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    I got bored, so here's another one (perspective of the girl):

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    We've been together for so long
    How can he still do this and go on
    He's been so ridiculously mean
    It's just lost it's shiny gleam.
    
    His eyes tell me the story
    He's definitely not sorry
    To him it's all just lies
    Ha! Part of his own demise
    
    I try to fit in and disappear
    So he can actually be sincere
    It makes me more popular
    He just hasn't come very far
    
    It was usually nice with him
    Always funny to the brim
    What is he telling me here
    I'm so full of dreadful fear
    
    Please let me stay in your arms
    Just a while to I can warm
    No, don't say that to me
    I just can't flee!

    It's been a while... but I'm BACK!!!

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    Top nudge. They're not really deep, which means I can actually understand them. Who knew ? They rhyme AND make sense, too.

    Awesome.

    -Knives

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    Not extremely deep but it is sad lol, prolly try to make it point to a moral or something but, its better than what i could do

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